A few weeks after I completed the first draft of my children’s book, Ozric’s Hole to China, I started a first-person version just to see how it would compare. I completed three chapters and actually liked the result quite a bit. It still needs work (I’m an amateur writer, so this pretty much goes without saying) but I think it’s an improvement over the original.
If you happen to have read OHTC, or at least the first few chapters, I’d love to hear what you think of this version. I added it to the main Ozric page, and here is a direct link: Ozric Rewrite Ch. 1-3